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Alright. Are you ready? This is the LAST part. Okay… Let’s see what happens! πŸ˜€


Erebelle was telling her mother all about Damarias’ new stall when suddenly she heard a bone chilling roar.
“Damarias!” She breathed and ran out to the barn to fetch her horse. When she exited the barn she looked at the ground for Damarias’ paw prints.
“That way, Moonlight!” She yelled and her horse raised back on two feet and galloped in the direction of Damarias’ paw prints.
Everyone in Charzul heard the roar, even Prince Neal who was looking everywhere for Alfred. When he heard the roar, he hurried to the stables to see if Alfred’s horse was still there, but all of the hunter’s horses were missing. Neal hopped on his horse bareback and he, too, went after Damarias, but this time, to keep him safe.
Damarias continued running, his face getting scratched and bleeding from brushing up against branches in the forest. He noticed a fallen down tree and knew he had to jump over it, but if he didn’t make it, the hunters would catch him. Damarias reared back and jumped forward, and although he did make it over the tree, he had a bad landing. The hunters caught up with him and circled around him. Erebelle came riding from the west and Neal from the east.
“STOP!” Erebelle and Neal yelled in unison, but it was too late. One of the men fired a shot and Damarias let out a wail that made Erebelle’s heart skip a beat.
All of the hunters, frightened by Prince Neal, ran away, but Alfred stayed and faced him.
Erebelle jumped off of Moonlight and fell to the ground in front of Damarias, tears pouring out of her eyes uncontrollably. Damarias turned his big eyes toward Erebelle and moaned. Erebelle pet his face and said, “It’s going to be okay, Damarias. I’m gonna get help, and you’re going to live.”
Damarias flapped his ears, as though he was telling her that she was going to be fine. Damarias lowered his head toward his wound and looked back at Erebelle with sad eyes and moaned.
“You’re not going to die!” Erebelle cried, but Damarias groanedΒ and flapped his ears again.
Neal walked up to Alfred and said, “I gave you orders, and you disobeyed them. Get on my horse. I’m bringing you back to the palace so you can spend a few years in the dungeon. And don’t even think about running away. I’m keeping my eye on you.” Neal commanded and Alfred did as he was told.
Neal stepped over to Erebelle and Damarias and knelt down. Erebelle continued talking to Damarias, but after a moment, he let out his last breath and was gone. Erebelle threw her arms around Damarias and sobbed.
Neal placed his hand on her shoulder and said, “I can’t tell you how sorry I am that this happened. I want you to know that it was not my doing.”
Erebelle tried to speak, but her pain was too strong, so she nodded her head. Neal stayed with her until she was ready to part with him.
Erebelle rose and faced the prince, her eyes small and red.
“Thank you for changing your mind about him.” Her voice cracked.
“I just wish I could have stopped this.” Neal said sadly. Erebelle sniffed and wiped her eyes.
“We did everything we could.” She said.
Neal nodded his head and said, “You’re very lucky to have had such a good friend. Not everyone is blessed to know someone like him.” Erebelle smiled and more tears streamed down her cheeks.
“Well, goodbye, Miss.” Neal said and rode back to the palace with Alfred. Erebelle stayed in the forest a while longer thinking of all her friends in the village and of Damarias. She turned back towards Damarias and said, “Thank you, Damarias, for being the greatest friend of them all.”



*sigh* I know. I’m awful. It makes me teary every time I read it. :(

Alright, now you all can go ahead and tell me how terrible I am for killing off Damarias. But I hope you liked this story anyway XD


16 Responses to The Mysterious Creature of Charzul~ Part 7

    -A Very Upset Cookie-

    I demand you take it back! Write an alternate ending! I BEG OF YOU! *falls at your feet*

    -Clara < 3 <– (that's a broken heart)

    • ….Yes. Yes, I did. :( XD
      LOLOLOL! Okay, okay. This is just for you! XD

      β€œSTOP!” Erebelle and Neal yelled in unison. The hunters all turned towards the voices and lowered their rifles. Damarias looked up and smiled as he saw Erebelle running toward him. He groaned happily as she wrapped her arms around him, making him feel safe and secure.
      “It’s okay, Damarias. I’m here now, nothing’s going to happen to you.” Erebelle whispered as she hugged him closely. “I’m never letting you out of my sight again.”

      Is that better? I don’t want you hating me at all… LOL! But you know, he still did die. XD

  • Awww! Yay! My little baby is safe! *hugs him*
    I will never let you kill him again! EVER. *evil glare*

    “But you know, he did still die.” –> Okay, you are officially an evil author. XD

    -Clara <3

  • Awwwwwwwwww. NO! Come back, Damarias!!! 😰
    How did you think of the name Erebelle? It’s so pretty.

    • It’s very sad :(
      Hmm… I can’t remember, actually! I think I got it from a Barbie movie. I’m pretty sure this queen’s name is Arabella or something, and so that’s probably how I came up with Erebelle. I’m glad you like it! :)

  • you are evil. You broke my heart. And i don’t think you’re sorry. BAD!

  • I cried ACTUAL tears when Damarias died. I’m not mad at you, but that was πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”πŸ’”

    • YES!!! Oh, I mean, I know, I cried when I wrote it… :(
      And the reason why I was celebrating is because that’s quite a compliment to a writer – to know that the reader cried at their work :)

  • Oh, this was so beautiful, so heart-wrenching, yet so lovely…love it, love it, love it, Jaclynn! <3 <3 <3 You are such a gifted writer!! Wonderful story! BUT….
    *intervenes in storyline* *leaps in with super ninja skills and saves Damarias* *hugs Damarias and will never let go*
    Heh heh. XD

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